my presentation

During my last presentation, my partner, Inba Malar was on to comment . From her observations, she said that I do not have the complete path of my presentation. My attention getter is not relevan wiyh my presentation's topic.also,I didn't put a flow in my presentation. Therefore it was such a miserable spech. Besides, my powerpoint slides are not arrange in the quit good flow. then, my presentation seemed not achieved its objective rightly. For my way of speech it out, she tend to give me a good comment on it since I use my sound projection quite well. My body language is not bad because I used a facial expression during my speech.

My improvement are;
1, Made a correction in my powerpoint slides. I have manage to make a flow for my speech about myself by classify my point to three major topics. They are past, present and future.
2, Making my slides more systematically. I've done some addition points in my slides such as the introduction of me-my biodata.
3, Discarding the attention getter and to replace it, I translated some words into pictures.